Melly
Mouse
Number of posts : 43
Age : 30
About me : I'm trying to find balance in my life. The good and the bad. The future and the past. My afflictions and my affections. The scales are tipping.
Registration date : 2008-11-23
 | Subject: Will You Save Her? -written by my best friend  Sun Dec 07, 2008 11:12 am | |
| So I wrote this poem during Bio because I was feeling weird and needed to get it all out. And I'm sending it you because...because I thought maybe you'd understand it better than I can. It doesn't really have a title. And you can probably guess what - or who - it's about.
Bronze skin caressing the fragile night
Taut limbs tangled, slipping, entwined
Soft hands touching
Lips reaching, hoping
And you
Memories race across the shattered membrane
Of a mind long dormant
Of a heart left mangled
Blood dripping down the open expanse of sky
Blue
Breathtaking
Cold
Dream of me, she asks of you
Dream of the days and the nights
Dream of hope and love
Never fear
The darkness beckons to her
Calls her name
Whispers its secrets
Entices
She breathes, remembers
Breaks
Will you save her? | |
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mcr666
Wolverine
Number of posts : 321
Age : 33
Location : Hotel Bella Muerte
About me : I'm controversial, but a good person to know.
I'm also pretty dang helpful if i do say so myself, and I have many ideas.
Likes : Poems, music, computers, friends, this site
Registration date : 2008-11-24
| | Subject: Re: Will You Save Her? -written by my best friend Mon Dec 08, 2008 12:56 pm | |
| It's sad and beautiful at the same time. | |
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Biomech
Admin
Number of posts : 256
Age : 37
About me : Test1
Likes : Test2
Dislikes : Test3
Registration date : 2008-11-23
| | Subject: Re: Will You Save Her? -written by my best friend Mon Dec 08, 2008 3:18 pm | |
| I liked it all except for the first part.
It was all good and well written, I just have personal....... things... that make me dislike that part, not because there's anything wrong with it. | |
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Tom
Bat
Number of posts : 113
Age : 31
Location : KENYAAAAAAAAAAA!
Registration date : 2008-11-23
| | Subject: Re: Will You Save Her? -written by my best friend Mon Dec 08, 2008 7:03 pm | |
| It's very well written ^-^ | |
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